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My father told me something that will forever stay with me,
He told me about the stars.
Each time he told me about the stars,
The story would be different.

One time,
The stars would be gigantic flashlights,
Somewhere far away,
Giving light to the people who are lost.

Another time,
The stars would be angels.
There to protect and guard,
Their loved ones.

The next time,
The stars would be balls of gas,
Burning thousands of light years away.
I laughed at this one.

The last time,
My father told me,
"The stars are me,
So I can watch over you no matter where you go,
Where I am.
Remember, I love you."

That was the last story I got of the stars.
My father died on his death bed,
And every night I look up,
And with a smile say,
"Hey, Dad.
How's it like up there?
Hanging with the stars?"
This completes the theme 'Stars'.

Obviously my father is still alive. I just picked him because he is so much more closer to me then my mom. Plus, this has a great impact on me. did you know I thought of this within at least 20 mins? By far the greatest poem I have written. At least that's what I think.
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JuliusScipio Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Student Writer
This is a wonderful piece! It's just got a sort of delightful fragility to it. :)

The speaker's voice is so youthful that I can almost hear a little kid's voice, y'know?


I think perhaps my favorite part is where the speaker finds the "stars are balls of burning gas" amusing. It's sort of fascinating, to see this simple perspective accept the scientific answer with a laugh along with the others. I love it.
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Germanydoitsu Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D

I was trying to make it like that. It's nice to hear that someone can envision what I was trying to come across. ^^

Haha! I thought since it is a little child speaking that they would believe anything but the scientific answer to it because Children tend to want any answer but something that is correct because of their imagination. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :D
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OpenCagePoetry Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a beautiful piece. Brought a tear to my eye.
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Germanydoitsu Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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OJSlaughter Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
This is eloquently heart-warming, very enjoyable.
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Germanydoitsu Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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randomise42 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing poem! Really touching and beautifully written :)
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Germanydoitsu Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :D
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Vyctorian Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012   General Artist
I started crying and I even read that your father was still alive
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Germanydoitsu Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww. :( I'm sorry I made you cry.

Yep my father is still alive. It's the fact of thinking if he was dead I would be devastated.
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